I read this in class but i edited it slightly. I was wondering if anyone had ANY idea what it could be about....any kind of direction it is or could head in, i could use the help. thanks! (because i wrote it using free association...it doesn't make any sense to me)
We didn’t sing, Despite the waving flags The playing music Our mouths remained unopened Vocal chords unplucked. Voices rose around us, Rose up, Twisting into air A harmony of dissonance. Sharing a glance, A wink, A half ironic smile, Not one word uttered Yet between us- all was said.
The stranger: Wrapped in dark silk Appeared unannounced Suddenly Unexpectedly, Had stolen our voices. Reaching out with pale white fingers That threaded the memory of sound out of our mouths, Leaving us voiceless. “Learn to listen,” He had said, His dancing hands wrapping up our voices in a silver disappearing box. “Learn to listen,” He had said, Gathering his shimmering cloak about his head, Turning, Turning, Into nothingess.
Our bodies became silent: Footsteps, The dull thudding heartbeat, The rush of blood, Of air Became, not stilled, But silenced. Unburdened by our own noisy selves, We drank up the sensations of Other sound: Deep bass vibrating in our gut, High soprano swinging through our heads.
We spoke to one another, Fingertips reciting poetry to the skin, Mouths hover- Then twine together: A conversation of heat, saliva and Hunger.
One thing to do is to think of your free association as "jamming" in a music sense. The pieces might not come together into one coherent composition, but there are parts that you really like and you can pull out to use in something else - or to rearrange into something that continues to please you. Words, lyricism...sometimes we put them together because we love the way they sound or we love the images evoked. So, of course, you must always save these free associations because you can continue to mine them for inspiration.
Hi Hester: What I took away from your piece was that a group of folks couldn't find harmony or their collective voice. So it was given to them by someone else and in turn that silenced them. But then the ending is hopeful. There's a lot going on in this piece - and it was interesting to me - but that was my big take-away.
I read this in class but i edited it slightly. I was wondering if anyone had ANY idea what it could be about....any kind of direction it is or could head in, i could use the help. thanks! (because i wrote it using free association...it doesn't make any sense to me)
ReplyDeleteWe didn’t sing,
Despite the waving flags
The playing music
Our mouths remained unopened
Vocal chords unplucked.
Voices rose around us,
Rose up,
Twisting into air
A harmony of dissonance.
Sharing a glance,
A wink,
A half ironic smile,
Not one word uttered
Yet between us- all was said.
The stranger:
Wrapped in dark silk
Appeared unannounced
Suddenly
Unexpectedly,
Had stolen our voices.
Reaching out with pale white fingers
That threaded the memory of sound out of our mouths,
Leaving us voiceless.
“Learn to listen,”
He had said,
His dancing hands wrapping up our voices in a silver disappearing box.
“Learn to listen,”
He had said,
Gathering his shimmering cloak about his head,
Turning,
Turning,
Into nothingess.
Our bodies became silent:
Footsteps,
The dull thudding heartbeat,
The rush of blood,
Of air
Became, not stilled,
But silenced.
Unburdened by our own noisy selves,
We drank up the sensations of Other sound:
Deep bass vibrating in our gut,
High soprano swinging through our heads.
We spoke to one another,
Fingertips reciting poetry to the skin,
Mouths hover-
Then twine together:
A conversation of heat, saliva and Hunger.
One thing to do is to think of your free association as "jamming" in a music sense. The pieces might not come together into one coherent composition, but there are parts that you really like and you can pull out to use in something else - or to rearrange into something that continues to please you. Words, lyricism...sometimes we put them together because we love the way they sound or we love the images evoked. So, of course, you must always save these free associations because you can continue to mine them for inspiration.
ReplyDeleteHi Hester: What I took away from your piece was that a group of folks couldn't find harmony or their collective voice. So it was given to them by someone else and in turn that silenced them. But then the ending is hopeful. There's a lot going on in this piece - and it was interesting to me - but that was my big take-away.
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